Joe Kemp\'s spotlight (critiques requested)

Forums ARTIST SPOTLIGHT Joe Kemp\'s spotlight (critiques requested)

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  • #2656

    Joe Kemp
    Participant

    some of my work in progress outside of the art clash

  • #2657

    Joe Kemp
    Participant

    this is a project i have had a TON of fun with. I adapted a rewrite of the Justice league movie by Nandovmovies (which is awesome check it out )
    I would love to get as much help with the story telling,layout, and overall success of these pages since I am SUPER inexperienced with this.


  • #2723

    Joe Kemp
    Participant

    there is a monthly contest over at svslearn.com that I decided to enter – this months theme was superstitions

  • #2738

    Brett Barkley
    Keymaster

    Joe! I’m finally getting a chance to write you. Sorry for the delay. I’m almost done with my current project, so I’ll write more when 8 can, but this is really solid stuff. I really like where your style is going and how it’s developing. I’ve been really impressed with your growth.

    I have some thoughts on page 1. The first two panels are too similar…and I think it is most to do with the foreground crowd and camera angle… In order to mix it up and make the scene progression more visually engaging, what if we zoomed in a bit and raised the camera a bit (while still keeping the security and speaker in the background? Maybe we could better focus on the crowd’s horrified expressions, see the security guards scrambling in the background and in the foreground, maybe we could almost show the scene from Clayface’s perspective, a sludgey hand reaching from off-label to push people aside. This leads in yo panel three, where I think it would work better reversed. Because of the way we read, we interpret left-to-right action as forward-moving, while we read right-to-left action as more defensive, or pushing back.

    Just some quick thoughts.

    -B

  • #2739

    Brett Barkley
    Keymaster

    Joe! I’m finally getting a chance to write you. Sorry for the delay. I’m almost done with my current project, so I’ll write more when 8 can, but this is really solid stuff. I really like where your style is going and how it’s developing. I’ve been really impressed with your growth.

    I have some thoughts on page 1. The first two panels are too similar…and I think it is most to do with the foreground crowd and camera angle… In order to mix it up and make the scene progression more visually engaging, what if we zoomed in a bit and raised the camera a bit (while still keeping the security and speaker in the background? Maybe we could better focus on the crowd’s horrified expressions, see the security guards scrambling in the background and in the foreground, maybe we could almost show the scene from Clayface’s perspective, a sludgey hand reaching from off-label to push people aside. This leads in yo panel three, where I think it would work better reversed. Because of the way we read, we interpret left-to-right action as forward-moving, while we read right-to-left action as more defensive, or pushing back.

    Just some quick thoughts.

    -B

  • #2811

    Steel
    Participant

    Great work, as usual!

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